Script writing day 2

We all met today to work further on the script. I helped my team mate (Niranjana) write a part of the script. This scene was the first of many where our main character replays his past memories. In this scene, it tackled his relationship and how it fell apart. I wanted to achieve a few set goal goals to be displayed in the scene. I wanted the main character to feel guilty about their past actions but also not know how to communicate to resolve the problem. And I wanted the girl to be frustrated and confused and ultimately be hateful towards the end of the scene. These are the notes I gave to Niranjana when making the scene. I also helped her clean up the dialogue and rephrase and change a few words to make it sound better. This is what we reached in our final product:

With this scene tackled the relationship like I mentioned before, which I think many people in real life have these types of problems. But I also wanted to tackle even more than just one problem. So, when I came back home from our group meetup. I thought another problem that as well could be relatable to tackle was the work life. This scene would be about the Musa being fired from his job by his boss.

 I tried to do a smooth transitions as well between the scene before and this current one by using a match cut. The scene in my mind would be that main character would plead to keep his job but his boss was fed up with his bad behavior n told him off.

With these scenes I wanted the audience to feel sympathy towards Musa but also understand why the he was wrong in his actions and to a certain degree he deserved all the things that happen to him. With this scene in particular. The boss character would be even more mean and uncaring with his words.

This is what I came up with. This is just a rough first draft but this has essential points I wanted to put across.